Twinkling Starz

Sorry if I offended you or anything, but I didn't mean that I can't deal with it. I can. I'm saying that others younger might not like the fact that ...

It's nice. I don't know why, but nice.

8/10 it suits your custom rank..

Good work, I really like it. Very beautiful and sad. The fourth stanza doesn't have much rhythm, by the way. -*Twinkles

Very dramatic and it showed your feelings well. It could have used a rating as well.

You're okay. Nice poem. It would really help the depressed person.

Yeah, I don't think sparrow goes well with this poem. Great work! It kinda has a quick pace, I like that about it. I hope the teacher liked it, because ...

I really like this poem, I loved the melt it back to life line. Very good. I agree with Triona, maybe removing 'with your song' would make it sound better. ...

Wow, this is a great poem. It really had good imagery and I loved it. Good work. -*Twinkles

Very nice, I think it showed your feelings very well. Some of the spelling and grammar mistakes make it hard to read the poem, though. Good work. -*Twinkles

Um, yeah. Nice, I guess.

I like it, but it was too dull and bland. It didn't have any rhythm with it, they were just words on a piece of paper. Editing will do some ...

Good, there aren't any mistakes. I like it.

Wow, very emotional.

Awesome. I love Green Day!